Monday 12 September 2016

Olympic Narrative

WALT: Narrate a story about an Olympic athlete getting lost in Barra, Rio

One day Valerie Adams went to the airport to go fly to Brazil, Barra because she is going to compete in the Olympics. Valerie Adams was competing for the women’s shot put, when she got to Barra she hopped into a bus to the mall.


One day Valerie Adams went to the airport to go fly to Brazil, Barra because she is going to compete in the Olympics. Valerie Adams was competing for the women’s shot put, when she got to Barra she hopped into a bus to the mall.

But when Valerie was looking outside when she looked out of the window she was that the bus went past the mall. She was screaming “ STOP, STOP THE BUS, I NEED TO GET OFF!!” But the bus driver didn’t listen, Valerie Adams started to cry but quietly.


Suddenly the bus stopped, Valerie wiped her tears away. “GET OFF”  the bus driver shouted. Everyone went out of the bus but Valerie was confused. She didn’t even know where she was. Everyone left but Valerie Adams was just staring, her stomaching started aching, she was so cold.


After a few hours she saw some cars coming, she waved her hands. Then a light blue car stopped and said “Do you need help” “ Yes, I do thanks for your help” replied Valerie Adams. “ Can you take me to the mall in Barra” said Valerie Adams, so they drove off.


It took 2 hours to get to the mall, finally Valerie Adams got to the mall. She thanked the driver and she went into the mall. She went to the Olympics and came 2nd in the shot put.

2 comments:

  1. Great job Anna I liked how you described Valerie Adams going to fly to Brazil, Barra to compete in the Olympics for the woman's shot putt.

    From your best friend Shelley

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  2. Phew Anna, I'm glad that Valerie made it safely even after the bus driver went the wrong way. Keep up the great writing!

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